雅思餅圖作文怎么寫？雅思寫作范文

發布時間:2020-06-28 09:26:31來源：魔方格

雖然雅思小作文分數比重小于大作文，但是小作文的寫作相對比較容易操作。在此建議備考時間充足的烤鴨們注重提升寫作實力和寫作速度。那么完成一篇小作文應該從何做起呢? 我們首先分析一下6分餅圖范文，總結一些得分和十分的原因，做到心中有數。

C9T3——Band 6范文

The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also a estimative for 2050.

We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, whith 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country this figure is represented with 24.1%.

The projections for 2050 show that the number of people with 15-59 years and 60 years or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively. In contrast, in Italy, the population with 15-59 years will decrease to 46.2%, while people with 60 years or more will grow to 42.3%.

Overall, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend on the rates of people with 60 years or more in both countries.

下面我們結合考官評語，認真研讀這篇范文，明確得分點和扣分點，讓我們對自己的寫作水平有更明確的衡量標準。

(1) 任務完成情況：

(得分原因)The answer addresses the task, “reporting sufficient details”(信息比較全面) for the reader to be “accurately informed”(信息準確)

(失分原因)even though in each chart one element is “implied”(暗示) “rather than overtly stated”(沒有明確描述). (如范文第2段中沒有明確說明2000年也門15-59歲人口的比重以及意大利0到14歲的人口比重;再比如范文第3段中沒有明確說明兩個國家2050年0到14歲的人口比重)。

(得分原因) “Clear comparisons”(清晰的信息比較) are drawn between the two countries. An overview is given(總趨勢描述),

(失分原因) although focusing on only one age group reduces its clarity. (最后一段只總結了兩個國家60歲以上的人口的變化而忽視了另外兩個年齡段的總趨勢描述)。

(2) 連接性與連貫性：

(得分原因)The information is well organised and a range of linking devices used, e.g. whereas; the latter country.

以第二段為例讓我們一起體會連接詞的使用：

We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, with 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country, this figure is represented with 24.1%.

(3) 詞匯：

(得分原因)”Vocabulary is adequate”(詞匯量和詞匯應用準確度足夠) for the task and “generally accurate”(基本準確),

(失分原因)though attempt to use less common words are less successful. A few errors occur in word formation e.g. statistic (statistical); estimative(estimate), but they “do not affect understanding”(有錯誤但是不影響理解).

(4) 語法：

(得分原因)Simple and complex sentence forms are produced with few grammatical errors,

(失分原因)but the range of structures is rather restricted(句式缺乏多樣性)

綜上我們根據“得分要素”總結答題步驟如下：

step1，找出要描述的信息的特征，比如占最多，增長快，保持不變等等。找出可以用來比較的信息，比如共同點，相反趨勢等等。

step2，組織段落，可以按趨勢分段，按比重分段，也可按時間分段。組織語言，盡可能把相關聯的內容寫到一起，用連接詞銜接。

step3，歸納總趨勢，找出最明顯的特征，最大變化，最有共性的信息等。

以下圖為例，烤鴨們自己來小試牛刀：

step1:首先信息選取：

(1) working 和sleeping最多，但是一個增多，一個減少

(2) 同樣減少的是going out with friends or families

(3) 相反花在relaxing at home和traveling to work的時間都有不同程度的增加。